For Jessica,
Jessica, this is overall a good post, but I think to make it even stronger you need to add in your perspective about it. How is she an inspiration to you? What do you admire about her? Do you think she should of handled her situation differently? Just add that in, also check your grammar, such as the second word in your last paragraph is "till", you should fix that, among other spelling mistakes. :)
For Sam,
Since barely anyone in my group did this, I'll comment yours...
I think this is a great story, just watch out for the small grammar mistakes, like not capitalizing your "i's". Also try to connect this to the book you read during this unit, and see what connections you can make between him and a character in your book.
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